Can someone edit my personal statement ?

it isnt an essay . they just sent me a piece of paper with some questions & lines to answer since i am a GED applicant. ive only completed two questions .
can you tell me if these are decent answers?

2. What are your personal interests and career goals?
My Answer: Since I was ten years old i have always held a high interest in the medical field. Dreams of becoming a surgeon shifted into dreams of becoming a neonatal nurse, which eventually transformed into dreams of becoming an OB-GYN. Knowing I can affect another persons life in such a positive way has always driven me into the medical field, specifically a career as an ob-gyn. The journey won’t be easy, but I know my goal is attainable with a lot of hard work and determination.

3. Are there any extenuating circumstances which affected your high school grade point average or test scores? If any, please discuss in order to assist the Admissions Review Board in making their decision.
My Answer: During high school there were some extenuating circumstances that effected my high school grade point average. I was forced to switch schools multiple times during the duration of three and a half years. Different schools had different requirements, teachers, and courses, which began to throw my credits and grades off track. Also, my parents divorce during the end of my sophomore year cause a lot of stress in all aspects of my life.

I am not sure how to end the last question (question 3) I need some assistance with that as well.

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